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9/04/2017 5:43 am  #1


Thoughts?

Opinions please! Excerpt from my latest novel:

Unconsciousness was warm, like hot chocolate in winter weather. Hannah didn't feel anything much as she awoke, just that her head felt like bricks and her skin was burning. There was something on her face, but she was too sick to care. Then, someone took it off and, oh, her face was on fire too, but she was freezing all at once. It felt like she couldn't breathe, oxygen couldn't reach her lungs. She felt a hand on her own. Then, something cold was on her face again. She couldn't focus, but it felt so nice.

The burning ceased. Unconsciousness claimed Hannah Jensen once again.


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9/05/2017 4:20 pm  #2


Re: Thoughts?

Woah
that's pretty good.


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9/05/2017 4:29 pm  #3


Re: Thoughts?

Whoops! I am so sorry! I read this a few days ago and LOVED IT! but i forgot to comment.


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9/05/2017 5:03 pm  #4


Re: Thoughts?

Aw thanks Daisy and Liz y'all are the bestest 😊


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future first responder :-)
~hallie marie~

 
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