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9/03/2017 3:46 pm  #1


I DESPERATELY NEED OPINIONS, PLEASE

She appears in a blink.
No one notices- no one ever does. That’s how it’s always been; that’s how it will always be. The Accidental tends to slip past the notice of most members of humanity- that’s how it’s always been. That’s how it always should be.
It’s a rainy evening in New York, dark and gloomy. The Accidental stands, somewhat damp, holding a piece of paper. She’s dressed all in black, with the exception of shiny gold nail polish. People find themselves walking around her, subconsciously giving her a wide berth. She smiles. That’s how it’s always been. That’s how it always should be.
She pushes her long black bangs out of her eyes, scrutinizing the paper in her hand. It’s a list.

Ramiro Schuetze
Carna Norman
Thomas Rossi
Quigley Barak
Raoul Romanowski
Nila Ferryman
Oceanus Smolin
Seana Sandman
Kirkland Bordes
Brigette Manser



Names. Meaningless names. She furrows her brow for a bit, considering. Then she folds the paper neatly, and slides it into the back pocket of her skinny jeans. It’s time for another hotel. Then I can figure out why I’m here this time.
Briskly, she sets off down the street; she’s not entirely sure where she’s going, but she knows she’ll end up at a hotel. She always has, and she always will. She’ll have enough money for wherever she ends up, too- The Accidental never has to worry about something as trivial as money.
Violette Smith, that’s her real name, although she can’t remember who gave it to her- or when, for that matter. She’s used this name throughout the ages, though, and nothing has ever come up. She has no memories pre-Boston tea party, to be perfectly honest. That’s how it’s always been, and as much as it pains her to think, that’s probably how it always will be.
Violette Smith is the Accidental, and the Accidental is Violette Smith. The history books don’t remember her- they never remember the important things, though. She is a secret, whispered of among military leaders, feared, held in awe… or she was. Now she is nothing more than a myth, a legend. That’s going to change, though. That’s going to change very soon.
She stops in front of a hotel- not too nice, but not shabby either. It’s one of those places that just kind of fades into the background. Perfect. 
The Accidental will not be noticed; the Accidental will not be traced. That’s how it’s always been, of course… and that’s how it always will be.

She walks in, all confidence. “I need a suite- and no, I don’t know how long I’ll be staying. Charge it to Violette Smith.”
She’s confident because she’s done this before- many, many times. Countless times.
The man at the desk nods, not questioning it at all. That’s how it goes.

“Room 31, upstairs and to the left.” Violette nods her silent thanks, taking her room key. Turning on her heel, she makes her way to the elevator. No one notices the girl in combat boots, the girl with the golden nails; no one ever notices the Accidental, unless her story requires it.

 


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9/03/2017 5:56 pm  #2


Re: I DESPERATELY NEED OPINIONS, PLEASE

It sounds like a time-travelling story to me. I REALLY like this a lot, though! 


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9/03/2017 6:02 pm  #3


Re: I DESPERATELY NEED OPINIONS, PLEASE

LydiaMcCoy wrote:

It sounds like a time-travelling story to me. I REALLY like this a lot, though! 

Thank you so much!!


Once, there were children with stars in their veins.
 I'm Daisy, an INTP, ADHD writer with caffiene and a dream.
I believe it is my duty to honor God through fantasy, and I will bombard you with information about faeries until you want to kill me. Ask me about my fandoms.
WIP quote: "Great, no one killed me in my sleep!"
Currently reading: Crowns of Croswald
Currently listening: LOOK WHAT YOU MADE ME DO LOOK WHAT YOU MADE ME DO LOOK WHAT YOU JUST MADE ME DO LOOK WHAT YOU UST MADE ME DO


If you need a reccomendation for clean fantasy/sci-fi books and movies, just ask me!

|Marvel| |DC| |Star Wars| |Star Trek| |Narnia| |LotR| |KotLC| |LEGO| |HGTG|  |Hunger Games| |Disney|

Iron man = awesome, Batman = awesome, Loki = awesome, Zaphod = awesome, Haymitch x Effie = awesome, K2SO = awesome, C3P0 = awesome, Spock = awesome, Eustace = awesome, Keefe = awesome, Biana = awesome, Bilbo = awesome, Pippen = awesome, Princess Leia = awesome, Batgirl = awesome, Tamatoa = awesome


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9/03/2017 9:39 pm  #4


Re: I DESPERATELY NEED OPINIONS, PLEASE

LydiaMcCoy wrote:

It sounds like a time-travelling story to me. I REALLY like this a lot, though! 

I must agree with Lydia! It does sound really good though!


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